{This is the post that was supposed to appear on Friday, but I got too busy.}
But yesterday [Friday] I worked on Sky again (surprise!) and found myself struggling this time with bringing out what my characters are trying to say. The two that are bothering me the most are Margot and Philippe, because neither of them are particularly open about their feelings. In the 1,186 words I wrote, neither sibling had much dialogue. This was partly because there was a good deal of narrative, and partly because I honestly couldn't imagine what they were supposed to be saying. I would rather do anything than
Have you encountered this? Have you faced an emotion-packed scene that requires you to write what people are feeling and thinking (perhaps not in their own words, but in your own as narrator, at least) and you just don't know how to go about it? I can't possibly be the only one. What do you do about it?
Philippe propped his chin in the palm of his hand. He said nothing for a moment, and when he finally did speak, it was softly and hesitantly.
“I don’t even know why we went. How much better it would have been for him to die here, among his family, and to be buried in his own, rightful grave with a decent funeral.”
“But you went for healing from the saint.” Margot hadn’t spoken throughout the entire meal, but now she gave Philippe a quizzical look. “I’m sure there would have been healing if you had only gotten there in time.”
“So it’s my fault, then, Margot?” Philippe raised his eyes from their blank stare at the bowl of cheese to Margot’s startled face. “If we had only left earlier or traveled faster, he would have lived? If I had taken better care of him, he might have made it to Canterbury, is that what you mean?”
How dare he twist her words in such a way? She hadn’t meant that at all.
~chapter two
1 comment:
I've found that the best thing do to with characters who don't want to talk is to don't make them. When they have something to say, they'll say it, but forcing them ... sounds forced.
Perhaps, when you go back and edit, they'll add their opinions, but I wouldn't worry about it.
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